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‘Not A Villain’ Webcomic – Page 111

Kleya may or may not have some big regrets...

And the blob fight for a coveted character spot continues in the vote incentive!

17 Comments

The vote incentive for this one made me chuckle.

Re: Mouseover text

I’m going to probably sound mean here. I’m really not good at delivering criticism. This is all nitpicky stuff; if I were asked my reactions to the page as a whole, this probably wouldn’t even make the list – but it reads like you’re asking for reactions to that one particular effect, so…

I didn’t understand the effect of the last panel until I read the mouseover. I can understand how it makes sense looking at it a second time now that I know, but it didn’t click for me right away. I certainly got the message from the dialogue, but the pose, expression, and lighting were just a bit confusing.

I think the effect would have been clearer if Mina were out of the panel entirely, rather than “fading” her out over a panel border. Something about the gradient strikes me as off, too. Kleya’s head should be in the dark. The image that comes to mind (mostly from anime, because that’s the genre that does emotional backgrounds most often) is an inverted spotlight, where the character is standing in a column of darkness with light on either side – or even an actual spotlight on them against a black background, if their expression is sufficiently distraught.

The combination of having the darkness focused on her stomach with her hand on her stomach makes me think of stomachaches before I think of emotional pain or isolation. She also looks like she’s actually in physical pain, rather than fighting back tears. I suppose people express isolation differently, though – and if she’s consistent, then I’ll know what to look for later.

Don’t take this criticism as reflective of the comic as a whole, or even this page. The rest of the time, your emotive backgrounds and other effects are good, and your dialogue is strong (awkward sometimes, but strong). It’s just this one point that’s confusing.

Nah, you didn’t sound mean. I worried the effect would be slightly confusing and I can see that for you, it was. Especially since it made you think of stomachaches! lol. I’ll try to do it better in the future, though!

Thanks for letting me know how you interpreted it! And thanks for reading my comic!!

i actually think that it was ok using the gradient as long as the first panel in the next page also would have that gradient. and as for the character kleya isn’t a crying type. (or at least we haven’t seen her to that point) so her emotions have matched up so far and it obvious to me at least.

i do however agree that it might have been better to take mina’s head out of the panel and have her bit there tail back to her since we only see her mouth and not her expression anyways if it goes to more anger or even hurt.. just as kleya in the last 2 panels.

thanks for this comic by the way its been one of the more interesting ones I’ve been hooked on 😀

In response to the alt-text: it worked pretty well. Also, don’t lose heart Kleya! The heroes that everybody considers villains are the best kind!

Your goals, intentions, desires and methods are unimportant. Once you are affiliated with a group, organization or action, you are ‘good’ or ‘evil’ as the masses label you. And your intentions are irrelevant, because if you do not have ‘good’ results (sometimes even if you do have ‘good’ results), you are still ‘evil’. The only morals, goals and intentions one must satisfy, is ones own.

Harry potter and the methods of rationality?

Just my own ways of thinking. I’m very big on personal responsibility and individual thinking.

I like that change between the last two panels. Seeing Mina there and then not is a clever use of an awesome trick.

You might mean “the DM flair” in panel four. Oh, and the last panel totally works.

Ha ha! You’re right, I meant ‘flair’. It’s fixed now. Thanks!

I feel kinda sorry for Mina in the vote incentive, and she does have nice hair. Not everybody can claim their eye colour and hair colour are the same either.

Keep up the good work Aneeka.

I feel so sorry for Kleya. Don’t get sad. You will show them that there is one hacker that is a hero.

Well either I’m smarter then Tim, or he’s just thick :p

I got it right away 😀

The last part of the panel is kinda shifting to Kleya’s point of view and how she feels the world is being shut away.

P.S. Love the Comic, keep it going!

P.P.S. [Unreasonable Demand] More Updates! [/UD]

Judging by the other comments, I’m just thick. 😛

Love it,and totally got the last panel effect. Poor Kleya! I feel for her too because it feels like her ultimate success is to NOT be noticed, especially for anything ‘hinky’ so to speak.

i think its going to be interesting when all of this is brought into light and how ppl view Kleya. Will Mina hate all of them and eat her words?

I felt the right thing for the last panel, but I couldn’t quite place the name of it until I read the mouseover. It worked well enough, but I think you could’ve adjusted it a tad to make it more pronounced. One suggestion I have would’ve been to put the blobs continuing to rage and rant in the background of the last 2 panels, then either fade the speech bubbles with the background or just fade the text, leaving only a handful of blanks. Make it seem like Kleya was tuning them out or was trying not to listen.

It’s a tricky thing to do something like that in visual media, especially since isolation isn’t something you can use symbolism for. The fact that you were able to do it as well as you did is a nice feat in and of itself. Keep up the good work.

Not A Villain Webcomic

Webcomic of a semi- reformed hacker trying to redeem herself in a post- apocalyptic world she may have created.

‘Not A Villain’ Webcomic – Page 111